Narrative

__Monday 4 July__ __Narrative Brainstorm:__ __Titles & ideas__ __If I knew what I could do:__ Tinky- has a high pitch voice and blond curly hair hes fit and healthy and never lies. (boy) (the story is written in Tinky’s point of view) Trace- Is an cruel, mean and decussating boy who hates Tinky so much he wants to kill him Harriet- Is a little 7yr old girl and is Tinky’s little sister she has got golden hair and cheery red cheeks and always wears her little pink skirt. Tinky loves Harriet so much. What is she like? Mum & Dad- Kind loving parents that worry for Tinky by how much he gets bullied but they have a secret that no one knows.... Tinky has super powers. What do they look like? Ms Lumpybeebottom (teacher)- Is a mean, ugly and she thinks she knows it all teacher. What does she look like? It’s about a boy named Tinky who gets a different super power ever day. But he doesn’t know that he has super powers in fact no one except his mum and dad himself doesn’t know he’s got super powers. The story is about how Tinky slowly figures out that he’s got super powers and every day he gets a massive surprise. In the end Trace gets a super power and tries to kill Tinky and have a massive fight 2011 term 1&2 Tinky gets bullied every day of his life and gets called “Tinky the stinky” by everyone (including his teacher) except his parents who feel so sorry for Tinky. donville, oakridge school __If I knew what I could do__ There I was miserable and soaked the rain pounding against my back surrounded by devilish gang of tretchous Trace. Standing directly in front of me was the cruel Trace staring strait down at me as if i’m no better than a rat. Battered and bruised I couldn’t help sending a shiver down my spine. Day after day I get bullied by Trace but today was different, Trace was furious at me today after I caught him trying to break into the vending machine and got him a month of detention. For some reason something snapped in side of Trace and he's as angry as every. So right now its been an hour since school finished and a raging storm has accord = occ. Trace thought it would be fun betting me up in front of all my friends and his at the schools carpark. My face had a massive purple welt on the side of my head, a cut on my temple and my noise split. I was petrified to see all my friend in horror of what Trace was doing to me but what made me made was to see the look on my little sisters face **My Learning Targets!** You have started this story full of descriptive writing Toby well done! **I will achieve this by:** Setting the scence and describing what it looks like, sounds like, feels like etc. Develop the characters by explaining how they feel throughout the story, and what it is like being them. **Date achieved/signed: Miss Stovold**
 * If I knew what I could do
 * How to disagree
 * why don’t they believe me
 * Who & Characters**
 * Problem & Complication**
 * Resolution-**
 * When**
 * How**
 * Where & Setting**
 * My next step is:** Keep developing your characters! Get them to grow with your story. How does Tinky feel? - compare that with how he feels at the end. You are describing your setting well - keep this up because it makes it easier to get a picture in my head!

__Monday 1 July__

__Narrative Brainstorm:__

__Titles & ideas__
 * If I knew what I could do
 * How to disagree
 * why don’t they believe me

__If I knew what I could do:__ Tinky (boy) Big billy (boy) Harriet (girl) Mum & Dad Mrs lumpybeebottom (teacher)
 * Who & Characters**

It’s about a boy named Tinky who gets a different super power ever day. But he doesn’t know that he has super powers in fact no one except his mum and dad himself doesn’t know he’s got super powers. The story is about how Tinky slowly figures out that he’s got super powers and every day he gets a massive surprise.
 * Problem & Complication**


 * Resolution**

2011 term 1&2
 * When**

Tinky gets bullied every day of his life and gets called “Tinky the stinky” by everyone (including his teacher) except his parents who feel so sorry for Tinky.
 * How**

donville, oakyridge school
 * Where & Setting**

__If I knew what I could do__ There I was miserable and soaked the rain pounding against my back surrounded by devilish gang of big billy.







Thursday 9th June This is our prior knowledge of metaphors displayed as a wordle document Metaphors are comparisons of two unlike things without using signal words such as LIKE and AS. e.g.The boy was loud and proud. e.g It was as if the trees waved at us when the wind would blow. e.g if looks could kill

Similes comparing something to another thing that is not alike using the words as and like e.g. He went as red as a fire truck e.g. She is like a cheetah. e.g. her room stunk like socks



Topic: Identifying Similes

Directions: Complete the simile by filling in the blank.

1. The car was as dirty as a puddle of mud.

2. The candy was like music to my ears.

__3. His hands were as big as elephant ears. __

__4. My little brother sounds like a__ angry ogre.

__5. My room is as messy as__ my sisters.

__6. School is like holding cell for kids. __

7. The chair was as hard as a stone wall.

__8. Her hair looked like__ birds nest.

9. The monster’s breath was like a huge breath mint.

10. The water was as cold as bully's heart.

11. My lunch tasted as plan as a bathroom.

12. The rabbit was as soft as a a pillow that was made from heaven.

Metaphors

Metaphors are imaginative ways to describe something by

comparing that thing to something else. For example, if I

wanted to say that Dan is tall, I could say that Dan is a giant.

Use a metaphor to describe somebody who is:

tall My dad is as tall as a graffies neck

kind My mum is as kind as my dad.

fast My cousin is fast captain underpants

slow

smart

fat

sneaky

angry

beautiful

ugly

stubborn

short

thin

silly

scared easily

He is a giant.

She is an angle